Kwito Fortana

Name: Kwito Fortana
Age: 25
Race: Twi'lek
Birth place: Ryloth Where on Ryloth?
Height: 5'11 ft
Weight: 166 Ib
Eye Color: green
Hair Color: N/A

Appearance:
Kwito has dark blue skin and green eyes. He has a ironThat's extremely heavy to have on your head for not a lot of protection. headband on as a protecteor. An average height figure of lean muscular stature this isn't a sentence. He has on leather fingerless gloves and a armor plate on his lower abs areaBut not his chest? Also, what kind of armor plate? How is it attached?. He has tight rubber like pants and combat boots. He resembles a soldier. delete period, replace with comma, lowercase the b.Built for war and very experienced from being a Bounty Hunter. tcapitalizehere are even some old combat wounds. replace period with commalike cuts cover his whole upper body but his face. He keeps on a brown mostly beaten shirtwhat kind of shirt? long sleeve? Short sleeve? Sleeveless?. replace period with commaduirty and full of wholes. He keeps on a vest what kind of vest?over that and his pistols andon each side. Asnd he keeps his rifle on his back and dagger on his lower left leg.
You know what, I have no time to correct every bit of spelling and grammar. Run this through a word processor and get the fixes done yourself.

Personality:

He is a keep to himself kinda guy, and it is rare for him to speak to others. He beleaves in the old saying of don't ask don't tell. If you don't ask he will not tell. He will not tell if you ask, thats just how he isThe implication of the phrase is that he will answer if asked. You should add something like 'even' before 'if'. He tends to walk away when being talked to So he's rude?. He had a bad and in some ways sad life. He was a slave so he spends some of his time killing off slave owners and freeing the slavesThis doesn't seem to have anything to do with his personality.. He likes working on droids and weapons. He is a bounty hunter with honor and even if he is told he could make more money he is not the type to turn on his first job. The fact still is he is in it for the money no more then that. He will work for the good guys or bad guys, he cares not. He works for himself nobody else and he never trys to become close to anybody.

Profession: Bounty Hunter/Mercenary,
Skills: Persuasion, Repair (droids and weapons), and rapid shot.

Attributes:

Physical Strength: 5
Intelligence: 7 There is no evidence for this stat. Since he's never had any education the highest I could see it being is a 4 or maybe a 5, but that would be pushing your luck.
Speed: 6
Leadership: 3

Unarmed: 6
Melee Weapons: 4
Ranged Weapons: 6 (8 With Rifles) One number only please.

Weapons:
2- KYD-21 Blaster pistols These are listed as weapons existing during the Rise of the Empire era rather than the Old Republic. There are plenty of UCC weapons to use here.
4- KYD-21 Blaster pistol ammo
1- Twi'lek dagger
1-DC-15A blaster rifle This rifle won't be invented until the Clone Wars
2- rifle ammo

Alignment:
0

Ship Name:
XS Light Freighter Arheim hates these, I implore you to reconsider.

Bio:
Kwito was born on his home world of Ryloth with many other young Twi'lek brothers. He lived a poor unhappy life so his parents who was hoping to give there 4 sons better lives they sold them all into slavery. Ryloth is a Republic Member world and the Rights of Sentience which govern all Republic worlds ban slavery. So this would be something highly illegal. I also question the logic of selling someone into slavery to improve their life. That is always a lessening of quality. You also jump six years here in not even a full paragraph. You need to show evidence that his life was poor and unhappy, and you need to paint a proper picture of his childhood.He was only 6 when he was taken from his family. He was sold to a hutt slave trader on Ylesia. The Hutt was training his own little slave army, most were kids of many backgrounds. There were some older men there. Rule number one throughout history of slavery is do not give the slaves guns. This is not logical at all.

The army was made up of many Twi'leks and deadly bounty hunters Perhaps it's not clear what bounty hunters are. For the record, they are people who go out and apprehend by killing of capturing fugitives, both legal and otherwise. They are not mercenaries.. There were many trained killers and they made the younger slaves into fighters trained to kill. They were trained well and nobody was friends with each other. They did not like each other they only did what was told. Nobody would talk or protect each other. You get hurt on the job you are left to die or is given a swift death by the hands of one of the other slaves. He was a slave for over 18 years working for this hutt. You gloss over almost two decades here in a single paragraph. You need substance here.

Then one day the slaves was hoping for freedom so all at one time the turned and killed the bounty hunters and the Hutt before taking all the ships and exiting Ylesia to escape to other places around the galaxy. He then took up odd jobs working for whoever pays. This is exactly why anyone with a third of a brain wouldn't give slaves guns. Hutts aren't stupid, this doesn't hold water.


He spent time practicing to master spasific areas such as advanced rifle combat training and some lower level duel blaster training. He gives at least a hour each day to practice and improved his ability with a blaster. He has even managed to gain a understnding of how to take a weapon apart and put it back together do to all the practice. He has mastered the rifle but still a long way to go with duel blasters.


RP Sample:

Almost was to late to be on the move when one thinks about it, to be called in the kill a crime lord was not a uncommon job for him. Hunting down people like this could prove fun every now and then, so Kwito was the man to call when somebody was to be done in. It was one hell of a job when you think about it, Narr Shadda early morning just to take out some bar skum.

It was right in the middle of a drug deal it seems, he would take his rifle in hand and just wait for his target to come into the lence. Standing there he would get low and aim though the window of a building accross from the bar. All he needed was a single shot and the job would be done.

This silent Tweliek man would wait calmly with the blaster rifle in hand and ready. The target was a Human male who seemed poorly armed himself but had about 6 well equiped thugs on his side at this time. To kill somebody like that and be gone before they get to him is not always easy, but it has been done before. So right now Kwito took his shot, directly after the head shot was fired and the gaurds started shooting, Kwito was gone in the shadows were he started.