Jodo Horung

[<('.'<)-echofire-(>'.')>]

Name: Jodo Horung
Race: Human
Age: 13
Height: 5'6"
Weight: 113 lbs.
Appearance: His padawan braid is a light brown-ish color, and it falls about halfway down his shoulder blades. He has a skin tone rated as an "average caucasian" but also slightly tanned. His eyes are a light blue with barely any blood vessels visible in the white area of the eye. His clothing consists of a typical jedi tunic colored white, and a jedi robe colored a dark brown. He carries a utility belt, and wears typical jedi boots and pants.
Birth place: Theed, Naboo
Faction: Jedi
Rank: Padawan
Bio: He was born on Naboo to a family of shop owners, and probably would have been raised to work his families shop if it had not been for a loss of money on his parents account. They decided to leave, along with Jodo to try another planet in the hopes of finding more money. They left Naboo in a battered starship, ion engines barely intact, for Coruscant. They nearly made it, too. But when the Horungs were about 25 feet above a landing platform, the ion engines finally gave out and the ship crashed, causing the death of both of his parents. But Jodo, who was only 2, survived. He was recognized as being force sensitive by a Jedi Master, who was returning to the Jedi Council from a diplomatic mission, and rescued Jodo. He was trained as a jedi, and was taken in as a Padawan by a Jedi Knight when he turned 11.
Lightsaber: bigyellowbox.tripod.com/plans08/rotatedfull.jpg Imagine that lightsaber, but without a tapered pommel. The color crystal is a durindfire, causing a silver color, and the power crystal is a silver synth-crystal, adding to the silver color, and also creating a powerful blade. His lightsaber is wielded in the Shien form, meaning he held it backwards, and He is able to use Shii-cho, Soresu, and Shien forms.
Color: Silver
Practiced Lightsaber forms:
Shii-Cho- 3
Makashi- N/A
Soresu- N/A
Ataru- N/A
Shien / Djem So- 1
>>Sub-form Backhanded- 1
Niman-N/A
>>Sub-form Jar-kai, or Dual Wield- N/A
Juyo Double Bladed Combat- N/A

Force-Sensitive Abilities or practices:

Telekinetic: 3
Telepathic: 2
Body: 3
Sense: 3
Protection: 3
Healing: 3
Destruction: 0

Specialized Skills:

Attributes:
Physical Strength: 3
Intelligence: 5
Speed: 6
Leadership: 5
Unarmed: 2
Melee Weapons: 4
Ranged Weapons: 2

Force Attunement: +4

RP Sample: Jodo darted around the mangled bodies of dead Republic soldiers and sheltered himself behind a large boulder. The blaster bolts fired from the enemies lines struck the rock and chipped off bits of the rock that dropped to the verdant ground. He knew that this battle on Naboo was vital to the Republic, but he didn't know why they picked him, of all people, to come. He spotted a few soldiers huddling behind rocks, same as he, and he dashed over to them. "Sir! We can't defeat them! There's too many and they have superior firepower!" One of the soldiers said in a hushed voice. "Well," said Jodo, "if they continue to advance on our position, we'll have to fight them, so let's attack now while we have the element of surprise. Hold off until my signal, and come out firing!" Using a force-imbued leap, he jumped into a tree, and pulled out his comm to contact his master. "Master! We have a bit of a problem here!" "I know." replied Jodo's master, cool and collected as always. "Well what do we do about it!" Jodo yelled into his communicator, trying to get a straight answer for once. "Well, I should suppose a surprise attack would be our best option." "Alright then, I'll follow your lead." He jumped back to his little huddle of soldiers and said, "Come on men, this where we live or die, so let's do it for the Republic!" "Yeah!" came the ecstatic cheer from his men. Jodo then spotted his master charging forward into battle and stated, "Let's do this." He ignited his lightsaber, and leaped out from behind the rock, cutting down enemies as he went.

[Meira]

Questions: Do you have a master arranged for this character once it is accepted? And why exactly doesn't he have the padawan braid?

The bio is sufficient for a 13 year old character, but I hope that through RP we find out more about his personality.

Lightsaber skills are too high for 13. I would recommend Shii-Cho at 3 and Shien backhand at 1. He's only been studying it for 2 years (presumably since he became a padawan), and is still learning Shii-Cho. Being so young, he simply hasn't had enough time learning to form to have the stats you put. No Soresu for now. He can learn that when he's older.

Force skills are a bit high. Drop the 5s to 4s and the 4s to 3s.

If you click the link in the template about force skills, you will see that just about everything you list as a "specialized skill" fall under the previously mentioned categories. Specialized skills are things like battle meditation and the like. They are rare and not for a character this young. Jodo should have no specialized skills. But that's not to say he can't develop them through RP as he gets older.

Attributes and alignment are fine.

The RP sample is alright, though there's not battle on Naboo at the moment. But that's alright, I know you're just going for the display of his combat skills.


Post when you've made the indicated changes.

[<('.'<)-echofire-(>'.')>]

Thank you, and no I do not have a master arranged yet. I have made the changes requested in your last post, and I should probably try to go find a master for my character. How do you suggest I try and find one? Is there a specific board? If there is I'm missing it.

[Meira]

Oh, I forgot to mention the destruction skill. It's very uncommon for such a young character to have any knowledge of destruction powers, as by their nature, they are more dark side. It would be unwise for a master to teach their student such a skill that might lure them to the dark side... so it should be taken out.

And the more that I think about it, I wonder if maybe the ones I asked you to lower to 4 should be down to 3s as well... He's just so young.

Again I want to say that though I'm asking you to lower things, there is always room for development in RP, which I consider more fun than just giving a character stats. I don't want you to get the idea that I'm just raining on your parade or anything.

Pending that change and the arrangement of a master, this character is ready for approval!

[<('.'<)-echofire-(>'.')>]

Thank you, once again. I'm just quite glad there wasn't anything horrendously wrong with it. I have made a post requesting a master... and I'll just have to wait!

[Meira]

Alrighty! When you get one, just post in here and he'll be approved!

[Jenno]

One thing, you seem to be focusing on the lightsaber your character has. However you fail to mention when he made it and how he came across the crystals to make the lightsaber silver, that's quite a rare colour you know.