Just a petty thing here, but can you keep her name and the 'name' title on the same line? Same with age, weight, height... It's just easier to read/see.
Appearance-- Could I have a few sentences of description in addition to the image? The image doesn't really reveal much about her. Particularly adding the traits of her race.
Birth place-- where was the ship when she was born? Above which planet, or in which system?
Bio--
* If her parents basically ignored her, who doted on her and took care of her?
* Maybe a few more details about her childhood? You have only two paragraphs from her birth to teenage years... Was there more reason to why she had no friends? I mean, it seems that the adults liked to talk to her, so why didn't children her own age try to befriend her?
* Why would a mechanic know anything about hacking?
* Okay... I get that the man taught her and it was maybe a lucky shot, but her second try with a blaster goes dead center? And only at 14?
* However, I do like the detail in this scene. Perhaps an example like this could be added into her early childhood? Just a scene of something she did.. perhaps explaining why she didn't like friends.
* Why would her parents, pirates, dislike the fact that their daughter was following in their footsteps? Wouldn't they want her to carry on their legacy?
* More detail about her time with the mercenaries... and on her strategy meeting. What exactly was she doing? Why would the experienced adults allow her in?
* Her parents let her go on this job?
* I know she was raised by pirates, but I'm still finding it hard to believe that these battled-hardened mercenaries let an 18-year-old girl into their missions as their equal.
* Why would the slavers cut off her hair? You'd think they would want her to keep it long so that she would bring a better price once sold.
* How did she try to escape? With her species' ability to be more flexible?
Also, her broken bone, was she more susceptible because of her species' more frail skeleton?
* Here in the last paragraph, is the first time you mention her being Force-sensitive. Seems like an oversight. Almost like you forgot about it and had to get it in the bio. Same goes with the traits of her species--it's never really mentioned, her differences from a baseline human.
* Okay, so she hasn't been sold yet... are you planning on having someone on the forum buy her, or just give her an NPC master? Just curious. Either way, I'd like to know which planet this market is on, just so we know where she is.
Overall, I would like to see this bio cleaned up a bit, more details added here in there, including talking about how she uses her species' traits in her life. Like, I understand that she has a nasty streak and likes to fight, but I would think that a lot of her violence would injure her--especially when she headbutts the guard in the RP sample. And I would like more detail as to where her pirate ship goes on all these jobs and missions, like which sector, or even which planet they are nearby.
Stats-- these are fine.
RP Sample--
* maimed a guard? really?
* Also, I'd like a bit longer of a sample.
Okay... you have a great start here. Just some more details to add and tweaks to do.
Let me know when I can look again.
I'll probably end up putting her bio together regardless... perhaps they might run into each other in the future? 
I'll probably end up putting her bio together regardless... perhaps they might run into each other in the future? 
