Declamator

I'm going to poke my head in for a moment:

So how exactly does a DJ, who, as far as I can tell, is a lone wolf, get the resources and the people to man this thing? I mean, this thing is more powerful than some of the stronger ships that the Republic and Sith operate, and they're both the two big players on the Galactic scale. Why does Kulan have, or even need this? Because, from what I can tell, it's not even mentioned in his bio, unless I'm missing something. This isn't the sort of ship you can just grab because you want one.

This ship is going along with a story line that involves Kulan developing a puppet corporation that will be operating from Ambria to bring a twisted kind of peace to the galaxy by having dealings with the other factions. I will be doing rps in order to gain this ship, so im not just pulling it out of the air.

Now, the problem with this being a dreadnaught. They are anything but subtle. I'm gong to be frank here and ask how the hell your Dar Jedi got a hold of this ship, not to mention found over 30,000 like-minded individuals to pilot it. Militaries don't exactly take kindly to these things.

According to the ship spec table, it says that a battleship is up to 1500m long, thats why the role is currently set to battleship and not dreadnought. All other aspects that where asked to be edited, have been edited.

As for the fact of the ship being this large and getting 30,000 individuals to crew it. I once more must bring up the fact that this ship will be developed and created over so many roleplay threads and will not automatically be given to Kulan. He will be gaining it through roleplaying threads. ^_^

Ship completely revamped from original idea.

Hey look its a UNSC Frigate! *points* How many archer pods?!?! What about a MAC Cannon!? It needs a mac cannon!!!!!!!

:3 Keep in mind that you need 6:1 odds to beat the coven-oh wait...

... this isn't halo...

Okay. Seriously, though. How does a Dark Jedi Master build (or buy) a ship of this class on top of paying for its maintenance and the people to man it? A cruiser is a warship that only a high class independant security agency (or government) could get.

A prestigious company like Rendili hyperworks would never construct a single warship like that for anyone, let alone someone contacted through back channels that were most probably illegal. Though that's beside the point. Bear in mind that they would have been contracted by whatever gov't that contracts to them to build ships, not one ship, but many. Drafting up a fully armed and armored warship is no cheap task, nor is finding all the materials and creating the parts that make the parts that go on the ship. (the latter of which is VERY expensive), let alone building the gorram thing. They certainly wouldn't dead drop it.

So, in short, your Dark Jedi would not be able to have this bit o terror. Unless, of course, he stole it from someone. But stealing a fully operational cruiser is no easy task. I suggest kicking it down to a corvette/frigate and mod the stats accordingly. But even then he'd have to be one rich and well connected MFer to get it, and your excuse still wouldn't cut it.

Speed: That's perty dam fast for a cruiser.

Shields: Few things short of a battleship have backup shield generators. Not enough power or space.

Kulan, follow the new format. Do away with everything that's not on there, please. Its not necessary and I could make this review a novel. You're better off, trust me.

Completely Revamped.....again >_>

Turbolasers go on capital ships.

fixed