Lord Eval (WIP)

[BennyAwesome]

I think my concept is simple and can be done. The other dark jedi will be other players that will join my order in the future. If you think he is too young I can make him older. Do you know what are some species with long life in star wars that I can use?

For the rest I want to wait for Sailor Sparra and see what she says.

[☠War☢Gerbil☠]

Apr 2, 2011 1:29:21 GMT -5 BennyAwesome said:

I think my concept is simple and can be done. The other dark jedi will be other players that will join my order in the future. might wanna create the faction app for it first before you're so sure. If you think he is too young I can make him older. Do you know what are some species with long life in star wars that I can use?yes, the Pau'an

[/u] live for a really long time...but if remember the older your guy is the longer of a bio you have to write.[/color]

For the rest I want to wait for Sailor Sparra and see what she says.Well..... so be it. ^_^ Can't say I didn't warn you.[/quote]

[Charlie Sharper]

I'm typing this on a phone, so bear with me. I've been on this site for over 2 years and so please believe me when I tell you that Sparra will NOT accept the app as long as it stays this way. First off, both pics are of cannon characters, the first is from The Old Republic, and the second is from the Force Unleashed.

Secondly, the whole living weapon thing? Seriously? I don't see anything in here that justifies that. Yes you talk about experiments and daily training, but you'll need a lot more detail then that to get that ok'ed. What kind of eperiments did he do? Why does he train everyday, flesh it out as much as you can.

Lastly, the stats, atributes and alienment are way too high. Much too high. The 9's have to go. 9's mean near godlike, and they wont me allowed. End of story. And the-10 wont do either, being absolutely evil is unrealistic and I 'd put money that says Sparra wont allow it. The same goes for the 9 in unarmed, I 'd say try a 7 but that might not be low enough. I don't mean to sound like a know-it-all but I can assure you that Sparra will say the same kinds of things.

That's all I can really get out on this darn phone, feel free to pm me with questions and good luck with your app

[Karl the Unfettered]

Your character is not the Chosen One. Your character is the not the Antichrist, or the Big Bad, or anything, so you'd better adjust accordingly. The length of your bio is what we expect from Youngling characters, those little kids who hang around the Jedi Temple waiting to become Padawans. The pictures cannot be used; write a description, a good one.

The age of 22 is when we allow Knight-level characters, and no younger. The stats you have are beyond Darth Sidious, or Count Dooku, or even Revan; if you want this concept at all you must bring them down a lot, which I have told you at least three times, and the others have mentioned it several times as well. To even get one 9, or even an 8, requires a crazy bio length and an RP sample that shows you can deal with it and handle it well; with your bio and RP sample, I wouldn't allow a 7. Anywhere. Not even for his age.

Now open your eyes and listen to us. Sparra won't even come around to look until you've fixed the things we've brought up, so fix them and we'll get back to business.

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Moving to Incomplete.