Post by { Lasky } on Mar 21, 2009 0:14:33 GMT -5
M'kay ~
Rescuing a Twi'lek chica that Tor once knew?
Sounds ok to me, but there's a few things I'm failing to understand...
... "Aila found work singing and dancing with the O'tanis."
Meh? There seems to be an apostrophe sneaking in there with
Tor's last name. And although the Otani family might have some
musical talent, they don't make a habit of singing or dancing. A
retired Mandalorian once taught Tor how to play / use the Besbev
(Mando War Flute), but that's about as far as it goes.
How about this... maybe she tutored Tor on how to sing better
and helped him expand on his flute playing ability. Tor paid her
with the extra credits he had saved up from upgrading people's
blasters, thereby helping her get out of the tough spot she was in.
If they were best friends, it's highly unlikely Tor would just up
and leave her; he's a fiercely loyal type of person. In fact, if she
had spent time with the Otani, they would most likely adopt her,
nullifying her financial troubles and also providing a solution to
her problem of getting captured by Hutts.
I like the idea for Miss Aila Lalone, a lot. ^^
Now then... we need a reason that she would leave the company
of the Otani. Maybe Aila and Tor's friendship was starting to
blossom into something else? Maybe this scared her a little bit?
Maybe she didn't like the idea of becoming romantically involved
with a bounty hunter, someone who could end up dead practically
any day of the week?
And so... she's able to post a plea for help basically, and Tor is
quick to notice it. So off he goes to once again try to be a knight-
in-shining-beskar, dragging the rest of the crew with him. I hope
you realize how crazy-killer Tor gets when someone he loves is
threatened - it would be pretty darn scary. o_0;
On Another Note:
~ I think I can post our group's first thread by Sunday evening
(the 22nd). We can start with the dialogue, etc while we're on
our way to Nar Shaddaa. We still have details to hash out on the
bounty for the Bothan slicer dude.
... That's all for now. ~
Rescuing a Twi'lek chica that Tor once knew?
Sounds ok to me, but there's a few things I'm failing to understand...
... "Aila found work singing and dancing with the O'tanis."
Meh? There seems to be an apostrophe sneaking in there with
Tor's last name. And although the Otani family might have some
musical talent, they don't make a habit of singing or dancing. A
retired Mandalorian once taught Tor how to play / use the Besbev
(Mando War Flute), but that's about as far as it goes.
How about this... maybe she tutored Tor on how to sing better
and helped him expand on his flute playing ability. Tor paid her
with the extra credits he had saved up from upgrading people's
blasters, thereby helping her get out of the tough spot she was in.
If they were best friends, it's highly unlikely Tor would just up
and leave her; he's a fiercely loyal type of person. In fact, if she
had spent time with the Otani, they would most likely adopt her,
nullifying her financial troubles and also providing a solution to
her problem of getting captured by Hutts.
I like the idea for Miss Aila Lalone, a lot. ^^
Now then... we need a reason that she would leave the company
of the Otani. Maybe Aila and Tor's friendship was starting to
blossom into something else? Maybe this scared her a little bit?
Maybe she didn't like the idea of becoming romantically involved
with a bounty hunter, someone who could end up dead practically
any day of the week?
And so... she's able to post a plea for help basically, and Tor is
quick to notice it. So off he goes to once again try to be a knight-
in-shining-beskar, dragging the rest of the crew with him. I hope
you realize how crazy-killer Tor gets when someone he loves is
threatened - it would be pretty darn scary. o_0;
On Another Note:
~ I think I can post our group's first thread by Sunday evening
(the 22nd). We can start with the dialogue, etc while we're on
our way to Nar Shaddaa. We still have details to hash out on the
bounty for the Bothan slicer dude.
... That's all for now. ~