Darth Scar

[Darth Scar]

Name: Darth Scar (real name: Ricky)
Race: Human
Age: 26
Height: 5'12
Weight: 150
Appearance: Brown hair, Blue eyes/Yellow.

Birth place: Bespin: Cloud city

Faction: Dark Jedi
Rank: Lord of the Sith



Bio: When Darth Scar (Ricky) was a young boy on Bespin, Smugglers attacked his home, killing his mother. His dad wasn't such a smart man, so he just flew off in the family's CC-39 cloud star, leaving Ricky. Ricky was taken to the Jedi temple to become a Jedi Knight. He was trained by Master Kyle and Master Joey. As he grew to a knight, his anger against his masters' overcame him turning him to the dark side, his sith master made him attack the jedi council.
Lightsaber: Single blade (blue)

Force-Sensitive Abilities or practices:



Telekinetic: 6
Telepathic: 6
Body: 7
Sense: 7
Protection: 7
Healing: 3
Destruction: 10



Attributes:


Physical Strength: 10
Intelligence: 3
Speed: 9
Leadership: 8

Unarmed: 5
Melee Weapons: 10
Ranged Weapons: 6

Force Attunement: -4


RP sample: Darth Scar stumbled to his knees, blood dripping from the saber slice. "So simple... Scar!" The hooded figure said. Scar saw his lightsaber shining in the corner of the market. "You won't win Mursha" Darth Scar laughed. Scar force pulled his lightsaber activated it, and jumped up and stabbed Mursha, blue enegry surging through her as she dropped to the mossy flooring.

[\J|K/]

Please check out the rules before you post.

A) You must have an ORIGINAL character
B) You must follow the character sheet when making a Bio
C) We are are over 3,000 years BBY

Please read the getting started threads.

Also I would drop Anakin's Intelligence to 2 or 3.

[Darth Scar]

ok, and what do you mean by orginal character?

[\J|K/]

One that you create not George Lucas. Something that you make up the back story and play. Also you may have no reference to the Sith. But this is all written out in the introduction threads.

[Darth Scar]

ok

[Zaine]

Sorry to butt in here, but there already is a Dark lord of the Sith. Also, if you were to pass for DL, you'd need to multiply the length of that bio by, like, 80.

[Darth Scar]

ok, then he is a dark jedi

[Lucaj Trask]

....Ricky?...Master Joey?...are you serious?

[Darth Scar]

his master was master joey, and Ricky is a common Bespin name

[Darth Scar]

ello??

[Meira]

He cannot be a Sith Lord, as right now there are only 3 Sith, only one of which is a Lord. So the title Darth doesn't work either.

I suggest you read our rules, timeline, and other accepted profiles if you are serious about creating a character to RP on our site.

[Darth Scar]

can i call him Darth Scar, but he is a dark jedi. and darth isnt a rank... its a title for one with the dark side of the force, a sith apprentice's name: Darth Kulgo (random)

[Iota]

there are only 3 sith at the time. Darth is a rank, of sith nobility. bio is far too short..atleast 7-8 more paragraphs required minimum.

force users tend not to be stupid, otherwise they wouldn't know how to wield the force, 10 strenght for a human? humans would never have godlike strenght. wookiees and trandoshans are naturally far stronger and can kill humans very easily.

and in your rp sample. lightsabers quarterize wounds, so there would be no blood because it heals the wound up instantly. Remember the jedi created the light saber and they are a civil bunch. Thero sample needs to belonger too.

Remove all mention of the word sith. Give your character a proper name and a proper biography aswell as reasonable stats and a convincing rp sample. i would suggest takinbg your time and thinking about it andnot just making it up on a whim.

sorry if i sounded harsh, but i am fair in my resolve.

[\J|K/]

Honestly check out the approved bios, you will get an idea of what is required. Please, read our rules and stick to them. If you can't do that there is no sense continuing. Everything that you need is in the rules and templates.

On a side note, rather than complain about the site's activity and your boredom, try coming up with a story and write it. Clearly you have not spent enough time on this so I don't know what you are asking of us.

[Darth Scar]

i did write a story, well starting one off with somebod else to contiune and then i reply back, but some padawan (member of this forum) said i need to be accept as a dark jedi or whatever i want to become to post.

the thread was the Hutt's assassionation

[Jasen Mors]

I feel like helping you out here, so I'll give you a run down and try to point out faults. I'm not trying to insult you with this, just help

Oct 1, 2008 18:31:13 GMT -5 Darth Scar said:

Name: Darth Scar (real name: Ricky) (As previously mentioned, Darth is a rank within the Sith, to use it would hold serious consequences I'm sure)
Race: Human
Age: 26
Height: 5'12 (5'12" doesn't exist, it goes up to 5'11" and then to 6'0", so he's 6'0")
Weight: 150
Appearance: Brown hair, Blue eyes/Yellow.

Birth place: Bespin: Cloud city (Bespin wasn't colonised until 1,989 BBY, Cloud City was built around then)

Faction: Dark Jedi
Rank: Lord of the Sith (There's already a Dark Lord of the Sith, as previously mentioned)



Bio: When Darth Scar (Ricky) was a young boy on Bespin, Smugglers attacked his home, killing his mother. (Why would smugglers attack a home out of the blue and kill a woman?) His dad wasn't such a smart man, so he just flew off in the family's CC-39 cloud star, leaving Ricky. Ricky was taken to the Jedi temple to become a Jedi Knight. (How? Who was around to just take him? How old was he when this happened?) He was trained by Master Kyle and Master Joey. (Not very convincing Jedi names...) As he grew to a knight, his anger against his masters' overcame him turning him to the dark side, (What annoyed him so much?) his sith master made him attack the jedi council. (Where did this Sith Master come from all of a sudden?)
Lightsaber: Single blade (blue)

Force-Sensitive Abilities or practices:



Telekinetic: 6
Telepathic: 6
Body: 7
Sense: 7
Protection: 7
Healing: 3
Destruction: 10

(Seems somewhat overly powerful considering you didn't explain much in his bio as to why he's so powerful. Probably best to tone each stat down by a few points).



Attributes:


Physical Strength: 10
Intelligence: 3
Speed: 9
Leadership: 8

(... 10 strength? He's 6'0" and 150lbs I presume, he isn't THAT strong. 6 to 7 at most I'd say. Intelligence, he's literally just a strong guy with barely any brains. Speed 9? That likely means he could move in a blink of an eye. Leadership 8, he's got such low intelligence that high leadership skills seem unlikely).

Unarmed: 5
Melee Weapons: 10
Ranged Weapons: 6

(Where did he get all of this training? Especially with the ranged weaponry).

Force Attunement: -4


RP sample: Darth Scar stumbled to his knees, blood dripping from the saber slice. "So simple... Scar!" The hooded figure said. Scar saw his lightsaber shining in the corner of the market. "You won't win Mursha" Darth Scar laughed. Scar force pulled his lightsaber activated it, and jumped up and stabbed Mursha, blue enegry surging through her as she dropped to the mossy flooring.


(I was totally lost, why did he kill this person? What was his feelings about killing this person? What led up to this?)

I hope this helps.

[Darth Scar]

not really....

[\J|K/]

You have a lot of work to do if you want this character approved. I will not point out any more ssues until you fix the ones Iota, Jasen, and myself have already brought up. Read the Rules, read the templates, and read the posts in this thread. Once you make a legitimate attempt at this we will be back to help. I'll ask the other members to not post as to such time when he has worked on this bio properly.

[Darth Scar]

to much for me, i quit

[Lucaj Trask]

wow, not to be harsh but...good...i mean we all have our application tweaking, but this was a joke....