Jason Medusius (FINISHED)

[Rizzo (who is a boy)]

Fixed-eth

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[Rizzo (who is a boy)]

This is what I put in at the end of the paragraph that speaks of his master giving him bombs and knives:

He hardly used the bombs so he hardly ever has to wasteany of them. He usually restocks about once a year unless there was some battle that he fought in which would be paid to fight for them so he would have money to get new bombs.

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Okay, the grenades... if you want to keep them the way they are (size of earring, power of hand grenade), then you're going to have to post in the Tech section and explain why they are so disproportionately powerful for their size.

How does he teach himself Force Concealment when it's an advanced skill that many Jedi and Dark Jedi don't know? Also, since his objective was to avoid the Jedi and his old dark Jedi master, wouldn't the easier and more logical step be to simply leave the planet?

How does he kill Rue, who from the way she talks is apparently the worst Jedi ever? Just because he thinks that the Jedi want to take over the world and have no concern for other people doesn't mean that they actually are that way.

How does he learn to use double lightsabers by himself? Why does he even do this since his main fighting style consists of hitting things from range (which is cool, by the way)? Add in the fact that lightsabers are bright and glowy and that he's trying to hide from the Jedi, it doesn't seem very smart.

Stats...

Juyo... where'd that come from? They are certain rules concerning Juyo, and this character probably won't be able to meet them.

[Rizzo (who is a boy)]

Fixed-eth.

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Moving to Inactive.