Felinians[new post ready for evaluation]

[catadmiralhousten]

Felinians
Sentient
Mammal
Amaz
36 years maximum
9 years to reach maturation
2 feet
5 pounds
Paws,soft fur
Felinian culture is largely based around wealth and power,however, they can ``mimic`` the light side of the force, therefore many priests also are interred into the culture.

Felinians lived in peace until 5,678 BBY, when the republic freighter Hawk, was pulled by Amaz`s star and crashed on the surface. Felinians scouts met with the travelers and repaired their transmitter, allowing Republic military vessels to come and pick up the survivors. Being in the Deep Core, the Felinians have strong ties to the Republic and Czerka Corp. They have also mustered a small blockade,composed of 4 Hammerhead MK.II Heavy Cruisers and 18 Blackcat Fighters.

[sparrow]

errrr... Cats are already a canon species. They happen to be just like normal cats.

[catadmiralhousten]

Uhhhh.......... Well, are they sentient? Because these are supposed to be.

[sparrow]

No. They are normal cats.

You might want to look here: starwars.wikia.com/wiki/Category:Feline_sentient_species

[catadmiralhousten]

They are supposed to be semi-sentient. Therefore making them different.

[sparrow]

Building a city that rivals Taris and becoming some of the richest beings in the galaxy requires a bit more than semi-sentience. And it doesn't change the fact that cats are already a pre-existing species.

[catadmiralhousten]

Hang on, so even if they are different they still can`t be approved?
P.S. They were raiders in the early years

[A®heim]

All I can see in this is Danny John-Jules moonwalking.

So let me get this straight: they just happen to be called Cats (maybe a backstreet galactic nickname?) but they're actually an entirely different species evolved from an ancient population of domestic cats left to their own business on a planet somewhere?

Good lord they really are Danny John-Jules.

Alright, if this is the case then you need significantly more detail regarding appearance, intellelectual capacity, and a far more comprehensive history.

Formatting for an eaier read would be appreciated too.

[Vipervertical]

How are you gentlemen!!
All your base are belong to us.
You are on the way to destruction
You have no chance to survive make your time.
HA HA HA HA

Ahem, now that that's out of my system...

If you're making a race of sentient cats, why not come up with some cool new name for them? Having the nonsentient cats and the sentient Cats is just...confusing. I propose Felinian >_>

Also, your history is confusing. You said they were seperated from the galaxy until they became freed domestic cats. That's...a little confuzzling. Might want to work on clearing that up.

And yeah, formatting plz. Makes it much easier to read.

[The Conman]

BACON, HIVEMIND!

[catadmiralhousten]

New vers.
Felinans are small panther like animals that are some-what sentient but really mostly on their hired mercs to do translating. In nearly 25,000 BBY, the ancient Rakatan race dumped these cats on the jungle world of Amaz. Since then, they formed an alliance with Czerka corporation, greatly increasing their wealth. Soon, Mandalorians looking for work flooded the recruitment place, raiding mandalorians would ambush Czerka trade ships passing through, then give the wealth to the ruling Lord, who would use the money to buy weapons and ships for the Mandalorians. They have even amassed a small blockade composing of 13 Hammerhead class cruisers and 89 Aurek Fighters.

[Lemur, The Kool-Aid Guy]

If they're capable of hiring mercenaries, managing an economy, and allying with Czerka then obviously they are more than 'some-what' sentient.

[Deleted]

starwars.wikia.com/wiki/Cathar

Just a thought

or better yet

warriorcatsrpg.com/

[catadmiralhousten]

How about I change them to fully sentient.

[Sporky]

No matter what you do, please use the species template. It's both more accessible to readers, and more aesthetically pleasing.

[catadmiralhousten]

Final edits done.

[Lemur, The Kool-Aid Guy]

Look, if you want a species of sentient cats you have to sell it. And right now you have a paragraph and a half written and its still not correctly formatted.

Realistically, you'll need at last five times what you have right now as a bare minimum.

[catadmiralhousten]

[brand new above is a variety of Felinians] Felinians, the rich and spoiled Mandalorian ally's. You may think there scum, but these intricate sentient species is allot more interesting than you think!

Felinians started out as, more or less, animals, native to the dangerous jungle planet of Amaz. Eons before the Rakatan Empire, Felinians began to evolve, developing intelligence to hunt and stalk. By the time the Rakatans got to Amaz, the Felinians already developed into a sentient species, even with there own language and weapons, repelling the Rakatans. 10,000 years later, the Taung settled the world, creating a strong bond between the Mandalorians and the Felianians. After the death of Mandalore the Preserver, a Felinaian Mandalore existed, named Mandalore the Hunter. After that they joined up with various alien species[some ill make later on], creating the Taung Confederacy, moreso, due to shortage of Taung after the Mandalorian Wars, it became known as the Mandalorian confederacy, and hosted numerous Mandalorian fortresses and outposts, including the capital, Sperasii. The Felinians always appear with their Mandalorian guards, never appearing alone unless confident in defeating any threats.[such as the grand general of the dual Monarchy]. In 19BBY, the Felinians homeworld, Amaz, was blockaded by the remnants of the Mandalorian fleet. The Empire soon came, and a space battle was fought. The Empire retreated, however, the Felinians joined the Empire soon after, however secretly supporting the Mandalorian Confederacy, which was part of the Zann Consortium. 1 year after the Battle of Endor, a Felinian Mandalore once again rose, as Mandalore the Shadow, raising an army over night, and destroying the Zann Consortium through insurrection, they waged a war on the New Republic, lasting only 3 months, the war was devastating, and the New Republic could no longer fight well with force, paving the way for the Yuzhaan Vong war. During the Yuzhaan Vong war, the Mandalorian Confederacy, supported no-one, ambushing Yuzhaan Vong warships near their territories in the Deep core, and destroying Galatic Federation negation transports, helping both sides. For the next 100 years, peace was for the Mandalorian Confederacy, until the attack of the Fel empire in 137 A.B.Y, the Felinians lost many territories until the final Felinian Mandalore, Mandalore the Warrior, repelled the Fel Empire`s attacks, and the territories of the Felinians and the Mandalorian Confederacy were never touched again, and peace followed, as the Felinians continued the time-honored traditions of the Mandalorian Clans.

[A®heim]

Look at some of the approved species applications. See how they're formatted and organized into coherent categories? That's what this application is missing. You need to focus and organize your idea and present a solid, formal concept.