Kito vs Zett Rem

[Rugs]

WHAT'S THAT, YOU SAY?

A DUEL?!

WELL OKAY



/uses previously used locale that wasn't really used because the fight never got off the ground

Five rounds. May be extended upon request

Er.... K comes before Z, so jakers is up first

[jaker]

Creeping through the shadows of the ominous, yet tranquil, building that had been painted over by the natures creative art, Kito made his footsteps as delicate as he could against the soft grass and rigid bricks. He found refuge in this derelict skeleton of once before, after laying eyes on what appeared to be a bounty hunter, one he recognized from a drunken night he once had in Prazhi and that only confirmed his suspicion of being followed. He planned to lure the hunter into this building and use the high points plus the veils of darkness draped against the dirty, aged walls to his advantage. Though he was unaware of what the bounty had in his arsenal, he knew that it would suffice to say he was going to be carrying a blaster or slug thrower on his person - this fact is what he based his plan on, ensuring he wouldn't go in blind and stupid.

The beams of light that leaked through the worn ceiling seemed to highlight a curious structure at the end of the large area within the ruin. It seemed to very biblical, with arches and decorative columns being part of it's main structure. Kito was unsure if this place was an industrial building or some sort religious temple... perhaps it was both, though the rogue couldn't understand why someone would build such a thing.

Shrugging off the useless speculations, the Grey Jedi turned his attention away from the awe and towards a wall which had a perfect nook in the higher parts of it's surface. Taking a few steps back, Kito sprinted toward the wall and a short distance up it before grasping onto whatever he could hold on, before climbing awkwardly towards the chosen vantage point. The walls integrity seemed to be aged and decrepit, with bricks crumbling away when placed his worn hands onto them, he breathed out to sooth his nerves from the surprise so he could lift his body into the nook in which he readied himself in, for the battle ahead.

[Adobi-Wan Kenobi]

Zett who was in a Temple like building that had aged quite a bit...
in some spots you could see right threw the walls and right threw the roof.
Why am i here?
Zett Rem asked him self although the question did not need to be asked he new why.
Oh yea the bounty.
he said to him self just to here the sound of the walls creaking and the wind blowing out side.
He pulled up the info that was provided bye the crime lord that wanted Kito a man that Zett met only a few months ago in a Cantina.
Zett kind of knew about the man although not much he knew the Zett had a small advantage on Kito.....but...... Kito had an advantage on Zett as well.
This.....is going to be fun!
just then he herd the sound of bricks falling from the wall and to the floor.
And.....I'm not alone.

[Rugs]

Round 1

Jaker
Effort: 3/5 -Not bad, but not great either. Wasn't much to it, and in that I mean substance more than length. I know it happens sometimes with opening posts, but there could have been some more to this.
Fairness: 5/5 -Not a problem, since there wasn't any interaction.
Detail: 3/5 Again, about average here.
Coolness: 1/5 -Since nothing really happened, there's not really any points to give here.
Bonus: 0/2
Comments: As far as opening posts go, it was about averageish. I'll be expecting better as the duel goes on.

Zett
Effort: 2/5 -You really could have done a good deal more here. Typos hurt as well.
Fairness: 5/5- As with Jaker, no interaction, no real issue.
Detail: 1/5 -This is the biggest weakness with this post. There's just not much in the way of details.
Coolness: 1/5- As with Jaker, nothing really happened, so there's not really a need to assign points.
Bonus: 0/2
Comments: Alright, so this post could have been better. What you should do is take your time and work through your posts. Think about details, check for errors, etc. You can do well, you just have to put a bit more work into it.

Total:

Jaker- 12
Zett- 9

With Round 1, Jaker takes a lead, though it's hardly insurmountable. On to Round 2!

[jaker]

Peering from his cover, Kito gazed upon his prey with deadly intent, one of them was going to make it out of this situation and Kito didn't plan to die today so the hunter had to. Watching the character walk through the decrepit building, the rogue noticed the man was aware of Kito's presence. His foot rotated on the gritty surface, giving small vibrations through the soles of his boots as they scratch across small rocks and chips of old brick. He made a leap towards the bounty hunter, deciding that time shouldn't be waste while he had the advantage of knowing the others exact position. Flicking the switches on his shoto's a red beam exploded out the handle, followed by blue with the other. The Grey Jedi crashed to the floor, spinning from the ground to face the hunter eye to eye with a blade at his throat. Kito's eyes were cold, narrowed and filled with hate, staring down his opponent.

"You sure are an idiot to think you're going to take me down, hunter," he smirked, teasing the saber at the man's neck whilst having the other readied at his side, for if the foe attempted to make a move on him.

Kito despised bounty hunters, especially the ones that hunted him down. He'd never forgive anyone in the profession, not for what one of their ranks did to his beloved wife that dark night... he made a pledge to cut down every bastard that tried to hunt him down. The rogue's eyes squinted from the sharp pain of his wife's memory, it only fueled his hate for the man even more. Ideas swirled in Kito's mind on what he could do to the bounty hunter and what would send a message... perhaps he could cut the man's limbs off and send him back to his employer in a delivery crate.... no, that might be too much he thought, he didn't want to delve back into those dark days. He shook his head, shaking away infectious thoughts and regaining his composure.

"I thought Bounty Hunters were meant to be tough!" he laughed, toying with the man, "but you, you're just too easy."