Jaden Ross

[velti]

Name: Jaden Ross
Race: Kel Dor
Age: 21
Height: 6'0
Weight: 180 cm
Appearance:
Personality: cold-blooded killer
Birth place: Hoth

Faction: Sith
Rank: Initiate

Bio: When Jaden had 10 years some sith warriors killed his father. They taked Jaden with them. They learned him to be a killer machine. When they didn't give him to save his girlfriend, he killed them all.

Lightsaber: dual (two) sabers
Color: Red

Practiced Lightsaber forms:

Shii-Cho N/A


Force-Sensitive Abilities or practices:

Telekinetic: N/A
Telepathic: N/A
Body: N/A
Sense: N/A
Protection: N/A
Healing: N/A
Destruction: N/A



Attributes:

Physical Strength: N/A
Intelligence: N/A
Speed: N/A
Leadership: N/A

Unarmed: N/A
Melee Weapons: N/A
Ranged Weapons: N/A

Force Attunement:
N/A

[Dalton]

Hello, Velti. I am Dalton and I thought I would give you a few helpful hints before the staff get here. Note: I am not part of the staff and you may ignore my suggestions if you wish.

You need to have a paragraph or two in appearance. A picture is just merely an option. Describe what he looks like and also what clothes he prefers to wear, or what he is usually in.

In personality you need to do the same thing, add a couple paragraphs stating what he likes, dislikes, loyalties. Not just a simple sentence. Personalities are more varied and vast then that.

Bio needs to be way more descripted. Take your time and really think his life through. Try it at about a paragraph for about every 2 years or so. But don't push yourself, if you can't think of everything in one sitting then come back to it later. It's suppose to be fun.

Also you can use a double saber but if he has a 0 in Shii- Cho then he can't have any saber because he can't use it. Also he hasn't studied in any other forms so he couldn't use a double bladed saber. Shii Cho is the basics of saber training and thus any other saber training skill can't be higher than that of Shii Cho, including double bladed saber forms.

Also his attributes have to be atleast a 1, even though they should be higher than 1 especially for a Force User, 5 is average and 7 or higher needs explaining in your bio.

Also since he is a Sith his Force Attunement should be in the lower negatives. Around -10 to - 7

Just take your time and really think your character through. Remember I am just a member and not on staff. You can ignore any and all of my suggestions and wait for a moderator to get to you.

[10Tickler]

Dalton: Actually, no, Force Alignment shouldn't be that low. Jeeze! -10 is like a Bane on the Galaxy, someone who not only kills kittens, but pees in the kitchen sink. They want to destroy the entire galaxy entirely.

It's an odd system, but You'll get the hang of it.

[Dalton]

Starshine: Yes, you're right. It should still be aroun -7 though considering he wants to be a Sith and all. They like to pee in the kitten's skin sometimes. So Velti, I apologize for my error on Force Alignment.

[kt]

Dalton: Not entirely correct, sir. The sith on this board run the length of the negative alignment from -7s to -3s and 2s.

Velti: I highly recommend looking at those applications that have already been accepted. Said accepted apps will give you great insight as to what you'll likely need to do in order to get your character accepted. Lastly, detail. Detail is quite important here, there are no unkowns.

P.S- I am not staff but that doesn't make any of what I've said less valid. Happy application making!

[Cain]

Still working on this?

[Cain]

Moved to Incomplete.