Dante Aengel

[D A N T E]

Name: Dante Victor Aengel

Race: Human
Age: 25

Height: 6' 0" (185cm)
Weight: 177lbs. (80kg.)
Appearance:



Dante has short black hair, and bright amber eyes. He's got a young, yet fierce face. He's got what you could say is a 'pretty boy' face, but his lethality, and lack of happiness reflects in his expressions, and removes that loveable aspect about it.

Wearing the preferred color of black, Dante is lightly armored, only covering around his neck, back of his head, and his left arm. It's a specialized suit for different environments. Not necessarily protecting him from the elements, but allowing him to breath under water, or in toxic fumes. In conjunction with the extending mask, there is a small comm system built in for whenever he may need it, weather it's mission specific, or if a target has unencrypted communications. His gauntlet is a computer wrapped around his wrist, allowing for multiple uses such as messages, holographic communication, and navigation.

The rest of Dante is just a normal dark fabric, which consist of a pair of pants, and a hooded cloak that provides a hood for inclement weather, and shadowing his face. Anything else is bare skin, allowing for free movement, and bettering himself in combat. He's decided that if he;s going to get hit by a blaster, why carry the armor, because in this day in age, the armor is rather useless to a lot of the rounds fired. He'd feel better off letting the force protect him.

Personality:

Dante is a withdrawn figure, filled with mixed motions of hatred and sadness, it's often you'll find him smirking or joking as a cover. He's a mixed individual, his heart set on vengeance, and what he feels to be retribution. Strong willed, and stubborn, he uses his skills with the light saber and force to strike back at the Jedi, hating every fiber of their kind. His old side, the good one, the one that put a smile on his face and kept him from killing everyone he came across was gone. The darkside has overtaken him, and it reflects in his serious personality.

Birth place: Coruscant

Faction: Dark Jedi
Rank: Assassin

Bio:

.0-10

The first ten years of Dante's life was spent in the jedi academy, where he, among other younglings, trained in the ways of the force, and began wielding their training sabers. Dante picked up quickly, among the fastest in the class. By the age of seven, he could lift baseball sized objects without much effort. At nine, he was picking up objects the same size of himself, and was taken on as a Padawan. The masters over him watched, and observed as his strength grew. He worked on his technique with a saber, and began combining them with the force. He used these techniques to help him survive in duels him and his friends would have on each other all the time, providing a stunning shock when struck.

Along with the training at the academy, something else was taking place. He met a girl in the academy, a girl named Liara Vex. She was in the same class, joining the academy the same day he had. They didn't notice each other until they were nearly eight, but a friendship quickly grew between them, a friendship that would turn into something much bigger.

.11-16

Eleven years old, Dante was throwing objects around like it was nothing, he was rather proud of himself. Growing into apprenticeship at the age of thirteen, he was tasked to build his own lightsaber. His master had given him a Quixoni crystal in conjunction with a bright yellow crystal. Combining the two, and forging a hilt of his own, his first lightsaber shined brightly. It was perfect for him, and he couldn't have found a better combination.

Dante and Liara were tasked out on separate missions together at first, training with their individual masters. Dante, and his master, Master Ramos, took the much more difficult missions, and he shared his experiences with Liara as she returned the favor. Sixteen years old, and Liara began feeling much different around Dante. She acted closer, much more drawn in. She even embraced him one evening and kissed him. He was shocked, and he didn't know what to expect. He knew what it was called, and he's seen civilians do it before. Closing his eyes, he returned the favor. It was a start of his imminent downfall from the Jedi Order.

It was their little secret, something they kept between themselves from the Jedi Order, and it was effecting them both. Dante began getting obsessed with her well being, and her missions. He had even gotten to the point he asked his master to accompany her on particular difficult ones. He was turned down, but it turned eyes on them both from within the Jedi Order. His master kept a closer eye on him from that point. Dante had to work harder to keep there 'love' a secret.

.17-22

Dante was of that age, were female accompany did a lot more then make him comfortable. At this point, him and Liara had become much more then friends. They were lovers in every aspect of the word, and it was becoming harder and harder to keep it a secret. Soon other friends found out, and then it was slowly getting closer to the chain of masters. Dante was beginning to get a little worried when his master questioned him, and his loyalty to the Jedi ways. All he could do was lie and assure his master that there was nothing between them but an old friendship.

Things grew complicated, and everything fell apart on Dante. Liara, the 'love of his life', became obsessed with the feeling the shared, that she wanted more then just him. Moving to other Jedi from within their class, she became what was known as a sleeper from within the Order. Dante grew increasingly jealous of the acts. Not only did he take control of the situation, he killed three jedi single handily within the academy. This didn't go over will with Liara, and she confessed that it wasn't anything serious. She truly loved Dante, but the feelings were extravagant. Dante grew furious, almost killing her out of anger, he turned away, only to be confronted by a group of masters. Dante was twenty-two, it was his time to become a Jedi Knight, but they weren't going to give it to him. Not after all this. What awaited him was a death sentence for the murder of three Jedi. Dante ran.

.22-25

Dante was finished with the Jedi Order, he was finished with the betrayal of Liara, and he was finished with the good of humanity. He walked the streets and watched as all the scum and filth lived there life in greed and envy. The Jedi were worthless. They haven't helped the world, and they hold back the love two people could share. It was because of that, that torn him and Liara apart. If they had lived out in the open, and could publicly be together, then none of this would've happened.

Now he's alone, his yellow crystal switched out with a red one, and his looks changed. He wore armor now, and a plated left arm with clawed fingers on the hand. He was in the hunting business, and whoever needed anyone dead, he'd gladly do it for the right amounts of credits.





Lightsaber:

Crystal: Quixoni
Color: Crimson

Practiced Lightsaber forms:

Shii-Cho
4 + + + +
Makashi
0
Soresu
3 + + +
Ataru
4 + + + +
Shien / Djem So
0
Niman
0
Juyo
0
Double Bladed Combat
0
(Weapons of Opportunity)



Force-Sensitive Abilities or practices:

Telekinetic:
7 + + + + + + +
Telepathic:
3 + + +
Body:
6 + + + + + +
Sense:
5 + + + + +
Protection:
3 + + +
Healing:
1 +
Destruction:
1 +



Specialized Skills:
Language (Binary, Bocce, Durese, Rodese)
Mechanics / Electronics
Medical ( Street Smarts )



Attributes:


Physical Strength:
6 + + + + + +
Intelligence:
6 + + + + + +
Speed:
5 + + + + +
Leadership:
2 + +


Unarmed:
4 + + + +
Melee Weapons:
4 + + + +
Ranged Weapons:
2 + +


Force Attunement: -2



RP Sample:

Dante peered over one of the towering skyscrapers of Coruscant, and watched as the flying crafts sped down the predesignated lanes of traffic. There were so many in this particular part of the city, since it was one of the more richer districts, that traffic seemed cluttered. Even if the smog that covered the bottom wasn't rendering it invisible already, the blinding speeders would. The lights flashed, and the colors streamed across the night sky and towers as clubs bounced and thugs robbed. It was a normal evening in the city, and once again another useless night spent sitting there watching as the innocent people lived out there lives, unaware of the secrets that surrounded the rest of the galaxy. Most of them only cared for there own lives, and if it didn't directly impact them, then whatever it was did not matter. They lived in a personal selfish seclusion.

The wind pounded into his body, sending his black cloak to his left, pulling on his shoulders. He remained unmoving, letting it flap frantically, but unable to escape. His left arm gripped the corner of the building firmly, the steel claws covering his fingers dug into the concrete frame of the building, leaving punctures where he gripped with his left hand. His hood was up, hiding his face in the shadows, and his body was relaxed, his pale fleshy chest white in the cold night.

A soft sigh escaped his lips.

Standing up, he turned his back on the bright city, and returned to his speeder bike. Mounting it, he lifted his armored left wrist and tapped a key. A red hologram of the district escaped, and floated in front of him. Using his flesh covered right hand, he placed his open fingers within the hologram, and pinched them closed, dragging the holographic map with it. The map zoomed out, leaving a much larger city in its wake. He then swiped it with his hand, sending the image flying off the screen, and another portion of the city sliding into view. There was somewhere he needed to be, and it was about time he arrived. Looking over his route briefly, he started the speeder with a switch. Flipping a pair of switches, he yanked back on the throttle of his bike, and it was sent towards the edge, launching off the side toward the thick amounts of traffic.

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Did you read the Dark Jedi/Sith notes? You missed a few things.

[D A N T E]

<FIXED>

I hope that's what you were looking for, if you find anything else, tell me. I'm still new to the site.

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Your bio actually looks much better, so I'll cover stats first.

Lightsaber: Too high, and you're still violating the Juyo rule. Take a look at some of the accepted characters in the Jedi and Dark Jedi sections (they're pretty similar) that are around the same age as yours to get a feel of where you should be.

A general rule of thumb is that any stat you have that is 7 or above should be explained/elaborated upon in the bio. You did a pretty good job with telekinesis... not nearly so much with the others. You never really portrayed him in the bio as exceptionally intelligent or really strong, so either develop these characteristics a bit in the bio or lower it a notch.

[D A N T E]

<Fixed>

Sorry, about the late reply, I was in the field for a week, and had just gotten back. I lowered the stats, since I re looked over him, and he isn't really exceptionally strong, or intelligent, but he is above average I'd say. As probably every playable character is on here. I hope that fixes all the issues.

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Reduce your lightsaber total to 11 and I'll approve.

[D A N T E]

<Fixed>

Roger. Fixed it.

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<Approved>

Practiced Lightsaber forms:

Shii-Cho
4 + + + +
Makashi
0
Soresu
3 + + +
Ataru
4 + + + +
Shien / Djem So
0
Niman
0
Juyo
0
Double Bladed Combat
0
(Weapons of Opportunity)



Force-Sensitive Abilities or practices:

Telekinetic:
7 + + + + + + +
Telepathic:
3 + + +
Body:
6 + + + + + +
Sense:
5 + + + + +
Protection:
3 + + +
Healing:
1 +
Destruction:
1 +



Specialized Skills:
Language (Binary, Bocce, Durese, Rodese)
Mechanics / Electronics
Medical ( Street Smarts )



Attributes:


Physical Strength:
6 + + + + + +
Intelligence:
6 + + + + + +
Speed:
5 + + + + +
Leadership:
2 + +


Unarmed:
4 + + + +
Melee Weapons:
4 + + + +
Ranged Weapons:
2 + +


Force Attunement: -2

[sparrow]

Moving to Inactive.

[Jenno]

Moved to Inactive.