ZG-28

[Jounin]

Name: ZG-28
Race: Humanoid droid
Age: 2 years after creation
Birthplace: Tatooine

Allegiance: Current Master: Raka the Hutt
Status: Mercenary
Rank: None
Height/Weight: 5'10", 190 pounds
Appearance: ZG-28 has the body type of a slim humanoid, it is connected by black wires, its face has a clearly robotic but humanoid look to it, and its eyes are glowing yellow circles. On top of the wires are silver metal platings with a gold trim. Each plating is shaped like a human body part but the joints are exposed to make sure agility isn't hindered. For apparel ZG-28 wears a brown hooded cape. 

Personality: ZG-28 lives to serve. It was initially programmed to believe it was meant to spar Jedi, but it was also programmed to serve its master by its creators. Now that it doesn't have one it will serve under anyone that its sensors deems worthy. In other words if person passes a background check, but some people like Sith or any other Empire ranking members will have to reprogram its Jedi protocol. The Jedi protocol gave it a basic understanding of the force, but as a droid it can't perform any of it.

Ships/Vehicles: none

Equipment: Two yellow lightsabers

Stats: (Feeble, Below Average, Average, Above Average, Superior, Legendary)

Strength - Above Average
Agility - Average
Intelligence - Superior
Charisma - Below Average

Force Stats:

Unskilled


Combat Training: List their learned fighting styles: Unskilled


Force Training: List their learned skills with the Force.
Unskilled

Other Training: List what else they are skilled in:
Slicing (Adept)

Lightsaber Training: Adept

Shii-Cho- Adept
Makashi- Apprentice
Soresu- Unskilled
Ataru- Unskilled
Shien/Djem So- Unskilled
>>Sub-form Backhanded- Unskilled
Niman- Unskilled
>>Sub-form Jar-kai- Apprentice
Juyo- Unskilled
Double Bladed Combat- Unskilled


Biography: Desperate to defend themselves a group of ten Jawas tirelessly collected parts to build a droid to defend them. In their favor they stumbled upon the corpse of a Jedi that died from what seemed like dehydration. They looted his lightsabers. After bringing those in four of them died messing around with the lightsabers. Four of the six got the idea that they could get an illegal Jedi protocol chip off the black market. The seller was an exiled Jedi who previously worked with the training droids. Three of them died  and the fourth became ill but lived while retrieving it due to a deal gone wrong. Now with three left they finally finished the droid calling it ZG-28, The Z and G stand for Zik and Glitz the first two Jawas to die and the 28 is just because they thought it was clever because 2+8=10. The Jedi protocol that was implanted in it gave it the data it need to properly wield and use lightabers. The two that weren't ill wanted to make it look more Jedi like and went out to get some apparel. They didn't return after a few days so the last Jawa and ZG-28 searched for them with ZG-28's heat signature on its masters. They found the corpses of the two along with a hooded cape. The last Jawa puts it on ZG-28 and they headed home. Upon arrival the last Jawa passed from his sickness. ZG-28 wandered Tatooine looking for a new master. A SIS agent by the code name of Rook found it and added implants to let it access the holonet for unlimited knowledge and gave it the ability to slice. This was in hope of bringing it into the SIS as a personal database. Unfortunately Rook met her end when she accidentally entered sandpeople territory and was shot in the head. ZG-28 read the signatures and killed the sandpeople that caught Rook off guard. Making sure that Rook is dead ZG-28 left starting its search all over again.

Roleplay Sample: ZG-28 trudged through the sands of Tatooine, its cape fluttering wildly in the harsh winds. ZG-28 scanned the near by area spotting a village. It made its way to the village and found the most heat signatures in the cantina. Upon entering it got stares immediately. A Gamorrean walked up to it looking it up and down.

"Look at this thing! It wields lightsabers!" He announces to the rest of the patrons.

"Greetings I am ZG-28. How may I serve you?"

The Gamorrean snorts at this. "Ha! You can serve me by giving up all your parts!" The Gamorrean draws an axe, but before he could do anything a lightsaber cut through his throat.

"Hostility detected...threat eliminated." ZG-28 replies while sheathing its lightsaber  

[Fromikeable]

A droid, you say? In some such way? Then a small price of time you must pay, for a review.



With my daily need to rhyme satiated, let’s proceed, shall we?

Name through Status look good, with the exception that for the sake of neatness, his status should just be “Mercenary”. No biggie.

In terms of Appearance, I’m somewhat curious as to why a training droid would find the need to wear robes. As long as that’s explained somewhere, I don’t mind it, though I might ask that the appearance be expanded just a bit. It’s a bit barebones at the moment. For instance; could he pass as a living creature? Was he modeled after any particular species? In a galaxy teeming with diverse life, I’m just a little curious if ZG resembles anything in particular. In addition, you mention in the Bio that he’s made basically out of used parts; does he look improvised or disproportionate then? What sort of droids are his parts from?

Personality has a few small bumps in the road I’d like to address. For one thing, why program a training droid with the idea that it’s a Jedi? I get that it was used by Jedi, but why make it itself is one, as opposed to just making it think it’s a sparring droid?

Beyond that, does our metallic friend here have absolutely no criteria about who it serves? How does it determine who is its master? Does it just do what anyone says? What’s to stop the village joker from walking up and asking for it to sing “Skip To My Loo, My Darling” while skipping off a cliff?

Also, I would just like to clarify that ZG here, as a non-organic lifeform, can perform precisely no feats involving the Force. He is, however, free to understand as much of Jedi doctrine as his creators could program.

Your Stats look decent, though I question the “Superior” in Intelligence. Is ZG designed to be generally intelligent? Or is he designed purely as a sparring droid? My point here is that if he was only ever meant for sparring, his original programing would… well, probably only have to do with sparring, which in the grand scheme of things would actually be pretty unintelligent. Additional programming could, of course, be added later in a bid to make him at least somewhat sentient.

As I mentioned, ZG should be totally Unskilled in all Force Stats. The Force only flows through living things, which excludes any and all droids. This naturally extends to Force Training, which should therefore be totally empty.

In regards to Other Training, the same problem arises; what exactly was ZG programed for? If he was meant to do nothing but spar, he certainly wouldn’t be given programming enabling him to splice. This programming could have been added later by some other party.

With all of this said, Lightsaber Training actually seems pretty solid. I will ask that you bring down Jar-kai and Makashi to “Apprentice” though; saber forms are complex, and a droid only has so much space for data. It makes sense that since most other forms use Shii-Cho as a building block, it should probably be the highest.

Now then, on to the juiciest part of all, ze Bio!

How exactly did this Jedi die?

Furthermore, who on the black market was selling Jedi sparring droid training programming? That’s an oddly specific product, while I’m sure a healthy amount of people would like info on how Jedi fight, it does raise the question of how exactly this dealer got his hands on it (as the Jedi program their own droids and don’t exactly post it open-source on the holonet).

Beyond that… I got nothin’. Honestly, it may seem like a lot, but these are all relatively quick fixes. I don’t foresee this app needing much else than what’s above. So if you could address the above concerns and let us know when you’re ready for another look…

[Jounin]

Fixed the mistakes, I added more to the bio on how ZG became so intelligent, I also stated in it that I don't know if the SIS turned into Republic Services at this point in the timeline. (Wookiepedia doesn't specify a date.)

[Fromikeable]

Alrighty then, a few last points:

For Appearance, we really are trying to avoid any mention to a canon source. Perhaps just say it’s got a simple design of silver with gold trim and we’ll leave it there.

As for the question of terminology, in our current setting, the SIS is indeed still called the SIS.

Handle those two quick things and you’re set amico.

[Jounin]

Okay! I thought of a better way to describe ZG's appearance and I took out the question.

[Fromikeable]

Hot diggity. You, my friend, are hitherto APPROVED.


Approved stats:

Stats: (Feeble, Below Average, Average, Above Average, Superior, Legendary)

Strength - Above Average
Agility - Average
Intelligence - Superior
Charisma - Below Average

Force Stats:

Unskilled


Combat Training: List their learned fighting styles: Unskilled


Force Training: List their learned skills with the Force.
Unskilled

Other Training: List what else they are skilled in:
Slicing (Adept)

Lightsaber Training: Adept

Shii-Cho- Adept
Makashi- Apprentice
Soresu- Unskilled
Ataru- Unskilled
Shien/Djem So- Unskilled
>>Sub-form Backhanded- Unskilled
Niman- Unskilled
>>Sub-form Jar-kai- Apprentice
Juyo- Unskilled
Double Bladed Combat- Unskilled