Post by Zapp on Aug 14, 2008 12:33:40 GMT -5
Appearance:
"Iced Tea of the Galactic Sea!"
Name: Brisk Sorbate
Race: Human
Age: Twenty
Height: Five Feet, Eleven inches
Weight: One Hundred Eighty-Six Pounds
Birth place: Anaxes // Axum System
Occupation: Unemployed
Rank: HoloNet News Hopeful
"Iced Tea of the Galactic Sea!"
Name: Brisk Sorbate
Race: Human
Age: Twenty
Height: Five Feet, Eleven inches
Weight: One Hundred Eighty-Six Pounds
Birth place: Anaxes // Axum System
Occupation: Unemployed
Rank: HoloNet News Hopeful
Bio: Born on Anaxes, Brisk’s family was considered exceedingly wealthy. His father was a prominent merchant that traveled around the Axum planet system in hopes for a large following. Gaining the respect of many civilians, Brisk’s father, Demetri eventually made a services shop in Anaxes. He made a profit selling delicacies and providing any physical service. When a young girl named Valerie requested his support, Demetri immediately accepted. This young girl was the child of two sickly metal smiths; because of her parents’ illness, she could not maintain a job. Wishing to place them in a cheap facility for the elderly, Valerie asked on Demetri to provide transportation. Soon the two adults grew close and decided to wed.
Due his father’s growing business, Brisk was left in the hands of his mother. Rarely seeing the family’s patriarch as a child, Brisk soon developed a need for attention. He knew everything that his father desired him to be, and was willing to practice these skills to become his father’s perfect creation. Demetri wanted Brisk to become a Republic Solider and bring in plenty money for their retirement. Unknown to Demetri, Brisk was taking unofficial rifle classes aside from his school work in effort to become a solider. While trying to make his father proud, Brisk began to slip in his school grades and eventually being kicked out of the prestigious academy. Brisk realized that his desire to please his father soon ended up decreasing his father’s affection.
Brisk, apologetic of his actions, applied himself for a less important conservatory. This was a vocational school that was infamous in the large town of the Anaxes Citadel, but he did learn some skills that he thought could make him into an accomplished trader. At the age of Fourteen, Brisk was asked to speak at the term’s graduation ceremony. This was an honor that surely gained Demetri’s trust back, but it proved to be a challenge to the young boy. He decided to go and live on his own to truly become an adult.
Contemplating on his future, the young adult began to read books written by military veterans. If he pledged his life to the Republic army, he would not have a life until he retired or was dismissed from his unit. He knew he had the skills to become a private, but he just thought that more things were out there for him. The books failed to convince him that the army was a healthy occupation. Walking down the citadel's boulevard, Brisk noticed a HoloNet landspeeder parked near the citadel's town hall. Brisk did not actually pay attention to the situation that was happening behind the newsperson. He was just astounded by this person's swagger. This was the job he wanted.
Being an orator was a very difficult thing to do. Brisk was sure that he had the voice to woo audiences and keep them interested. He was not sure if HoloNet was taking any applications. Transportation would also be a problem for the jobless boy. Luckily, the young Anaxan noticed an advertisement for an official Dueling Ring. He knew that he could combat aswell as those hooligans and get enough to buy transport to Coruscant, but he was not sure if he was willing to participate in human cock-fighting.
He decided on checking the place out. He realized that many of the competitors were brutes from the slums. He just did not know if he would be good competition for men with such hatred. In his first Dueling Ring encounter, Brisk was matched against an ex-convict. He lost the battle and some of the money he needed. Realizing that he had nowhere to turn, Brisk went back to his father's manor and asked for some money to leave the planet. Wanting to provide his son with all he had, he gave a whopping twenty percent of his debit savings to Brisk for transportation to the Queen Core Planet and possibly an apartment when he reached there. Brisk accepted, and flew to Coruscant, where he plans to make a living as a HoloNet News Anchorman.
Attributes:
Physical Strength: 3
Intelligence: 5
Speed: 4
Leadership: 6
Unarmed: 2
Melee Weapons: 3
Ranged Weapons: 7
Alignment: ##
+6
RP Sample:
On Anaxes, the temperature was always very moderate. The citadel's streets were sprinkled with filth and debris. Being in such an environment for so long, Brisk hardly noticed that he was kicking over metal cans and walking into the homeless. Horrid aromas penetrated his nostrils, but he did not care. He was on the way to the Galactic Spacecraft station. While walking, he began to realize that he was being a little selfish. He took money outof his father's hands without thanking the poor man, and was off to leave the planet without bidding farewell to his friends. Believing that he was too far from home to go back, he kept marching to the station that was visible from afar. It was medium sized building with small holes where the spacecrafts were launched. Looking upon the impressive building, Brisk motioned himself inside.
Once entering the building, he was faced with an extremely lengthy line. Many people were waiting for their tickets to go off on trips and business travels. Waiting patiently, Brisk took a gander on the holo-screens above that showed visions of hotspots and tourist attractions. Unknowingly, Brisk arrived at the ticket counter. "Excuse me, sir?" A woman asked him with an impatient tone. Brisk turned to her shockingly, and held out some credits. "Sorry! One Adult Coruscant, please." She exchanged his money with one ticket measuring six inches. Glancing at the content on the small piece of paper, he quickly moved forward out of the line and placed the paper in his pocket. "One the road to Coruscant, then..."
[Did I do this correctly? This is my first character profile for this place and I'd like as much constructive criticism as possible. I mean this is my first real Star Wars Rp, and I want to do it correctly.]