Some of my stuff

[Mara]

I don't want to have to repost it and all... especially since I'll be adding to "Full Circle" (when I'm motivated...)

So I'll provide links, if that's okay?


FF.NET account <--- link
Just one fanfic up now:
-- Full Circle: prologue, part one


FictionPress.com account <--- link
Various poems (4) and short stories (6) up there.

[Mara]

La.... okay, I've love it if I had some feedback on these. You can just post general things or more critical in here, or just PM me.


Most wanted read/reviewed:

"Homerun" on my FP.com account.
-- Since a good share of you are high school boys, I would love it if you gave me some feedback on the main character.
So far other feedback has been that his dialogue isn't realistic. Or even some of his actions. For his age and gender.
So I would appreciate ANY comments, whether general or specific. I'd like to someday finish it off and send it in for publication.

"Full Circle" on my FF.net page:
-- I'm just totally stuck on part 2, and it would probably be a great boost if I knew someone was actually interested in reading more.
I don't need major critiques on this one, as I'm gonna wait to edit till I finish the whole thing.


But you can really read anything in there.

[Synth]

Loving Flame. I liked that, and how you first describe the flame; a lovely scene... and then move on to a general description of love.

The end ends abruptly; cynical in its nature, the last 'stanza' seems to suddenly morph the imagery the poem creates, wipe my mind's canvas clear of the image of a fire-lit park and fireflies dancing over the couple, and instead replace it with a dirty street and a pet shop, dirty animals inside, and a sad girl(or boy) getting a puppy for the sake of some sort of love & warmth.


I liked it.

Now I can look forward to rping with you one day

[Mara]

Hey, thanks!

Actually that poem is a sonnet, so for the closing couplet I tried to go with something funny.
That's also why it's all rhyme-y and stuff.

[Synth]

I know very little about poetry forms, sadly. You can find some of my stuff posted in Unrelated Creative writing. =p And, despite being funny, and rhyme-y, I like it. It gives a good and unexpected, quite fresh, ending to the poem.


So far, Only used Vilanelles and poems in Terza Rima when it came to poetic forms. They are challenging, and my usual rhyme scheme is purely awkward and unconventional =p


I have a poem in terza rima somewhere written in assonance rhymes.

[Mara]

Thanks again.

Yeah, I prefer free verse myself, but I wrote that in a poetry class for a sonnet assignment.

[Mara]

I am shamelessly bumping this, wondering if anyone could give me some tips on what I have so far of Full Circle?

I am at a loss right now, while writing Part Two.