( new/modifyed)Coryn Nadeau

[Coryn Nadeau]

Name: Coryn Nadeau

Race: human
Age: 8
Height: 4’4
Weight: 70 lbs


Appearance:
Birth place: Tatooine
Faction: Jedi
Rank: youngling

Bio: Coryn Nadeau lived a normal life on Tatooine, his family was that of Moisture Farmers. He grew up living on the outskirts of Mos Eisley. Coryn would usually would ride into town with his father to hang about with his friends. a group of wired people a Rodian, named Javaar, and Anky Fremp. One day a Siona Skup Biomorph, A few days earlier, he and Anky has stolen some valuable Starship parts. each of them getting one, leaving him with a few things to trade the next time a Jawa Sandcrawler rolled by. As chance has it, one did, and at that meet, he saw something he had heard tales of .It seemed too good to be true, but it was; It was a rare blaster pistol, made of the smoothest, yet toughest materials, and luck had it, it worked. But the Jawas did not know what they had, so he traded and got away like a bandit with said blaster pistol.

A year passed, and the pistol was his one secret, yet one day, a band of Tusken Raiders went down on the Moisture farm, hell broke loose. Coryn parents were killed, they intended on killing him as well, there were three of them.Coryn had the blaster, and he sent the front of the gun towards the creature's gut, and pulled the trigger, impaling Through it's form. The other two were so dispatched that a kid killed there leader. Coryn was left with only a blaster shot to the forearm for the child. Luckily for him the smoke due to the wreckage of the Speeder car his parents owned was easily seen. Within the hour, he was rescued, alive, and alone.


It turned out the very person who saved him was a gray Jedi ,who left the Jedi order after being forced to kill his apprentice how was lead to the dark side . HE was wondering the planet saw the smoke from his ship and decided to investigate. The gray Jedi and his family took in the young child until he was old enough to start his training. After see much potential in the young child , and reminding him much of himself as a child . At the age of 6 he decided it was time for the young boy to begin his training. The family sent him to the Jedi temple to start his Jedi training. Ever since entering the temple the Jedi sensed a strong flow in the force within Coryn , just as his master did with him. They put him through a small test to see how strong he was. The conical where surprised to see that for a child he possessed quit a bit of power. Coryn slowly made his way from youngling to one day be a padawn, All the while counting to surprise the Jedi.



Lightsaber:
Training Saber: Single-Blade
Color: Blue (Training Saber)

Practiced Lightsaber forms:

Shii-Cho - 2
Makashi - N/A
Soresu - N/A
Ataru - N/A
Shien / Djem So - N/A
>>Sub-form Backhanded
Niman - N/A
>>Sub-form Jar-kai, or duel Weild
Juyo / Vaapad - N/A
Double Bladed Combat - N/A

Force-Sensitive Abilities or practices:

Telekinetic: 2
Telepathic: 2
Body: 1
Sense: 1
Protection: 2
Healing:2
Destruction: 0

Specialized Skills: N/A

Attributes:

Physical Strength: 3
Intelligence: 4
Speed: 2
Leadership: 2

Unarmed: 3
Melee Weapons: 3
Ranged Weapons: 4

Force Attunement: +2

[Iota]

there were no rebels in this era..and the sith have only just started again after a 300 year hiatus. i can see you have only changed the name and a few bits here n there. i really suggest you sit down and come up with an original character who is not linked to the sith.. but use dark jedi instead. it seems that this is a quick draw character to just get into rp straight away.. unfortunatley you really need to think about your character and come up with a plausible bio etc.

[Coryn Nadeau]

all............ok then

[Meira]

Ok, you give his birthplace as Coruscant, but he grows up on Tatooine? I'm not saying this is impossible, but it does need to be explained. Also, you call him both Coryn and Jacen in this bio. Pick one and stick with it.

Jedi do not have families. They sever ties with their biological family when they are taken into the Order. So this Jedi that found him would either have to be a gray Jedi who left the order, or something along those lines.

Also, I'm sorry, but... if a child who had no training with lightsabers tried to use one, even being force sensitive, he would most likely hurt himself. Adults who try to handle a lightsaber in combat usually lose an arm or other body part. So this method of defense will not do.

A youngling is selected as a padawan between 11 and 13. He cannot have been selected as a padawan yet. You will have to change him to a youngling both at rank and in the bio.

As far as stats, they are all too high for an 8 year old. He would not have lightsaber training in any form other than Shii-Cho, and a 3 is pushing it. I will accept it, if it is backed up in the bio with a description of his knack for lightsaber combat. The other two forms need to be n/a. A student will not learn specific forms until they become a padawan.

Force sensitive stats need to be lowered to 1s and 2s. 0 on destruction. Destruction is a dark side category. No Jedi student would be taught these types of abilities.

Physical stats shouldn't be more than 4 for any of them.

[Meira]

Alrighty... again I say that a child is not going to be accepted into the Jedi Order after the age of 6.

Also, if you're going to stick with the gray Jedi story here, then you need to give a reason why he would send the boy to the Jedi. After all, in order to be a gray Jedi, he either left the Order willingly, or was kicked out. Either way, why would he want the boy to train with the Jedi. It's not an entirely impossible thing, but explanation is required.

When you say he had a strong flow of the force within him like his father, do you mean the grey Jedi?

Go over the bio looking for spelling and grammar mistakes. You have a lot of run-on sentences. Try to look for convenient writing. This is over all pretty good. Make those quick corrections and I should be able to approve you.