.::.Violet's app.::.

[violet]

dark Jedi

Name:Violet
Race:Twi'lek
Age:30
Height:5'7
Weight:120
Appearance: www.kimdylla.com/other/Fashion/lynmeface.jpg
Birth place: Ryloth

Faction: Dark Jedi

Rank: Acolyte

Bio: A young Twi'lek named Violet is from the planet Ryloth. She is very fit and extremly healthy. Her Father was the Prime Minister, and her Mother died after she gave birth to her. She went to the Jedi council to ask if she could become a Jedi, but they denied her. And the reason she is willing to become a Sith Lord is after they denied her they killed her father because they thought he was a murder. Now she wants revenge on the Jedi.



Lightsaber: Dual


Color: (Sith)1st Purple and 2nd Red {if possible}

[Jenno]

Okay, looks like you've got down the basic information. But I would recommend maybe at least two more paragraphs of biography. I mean, you've got a 30 year old character, so a lot of history to expand upon.

Also, you might wanna think about the age, there's nothing wrong with it, but at that rank you'll have ankle-high sith wannabes dueling with you on equal footing. And that will most likely get annoying.

Oh, and the Jedi wouldn't kill her father if they thought he was a murderer. By the workings of the Jedi code, they would have merely pursued a course of action that would have led to his capture, they don't actively search for people to kill.

[Jenno]

Moved to Incomplete Profiles.