Post by starwarsgirl008 on Apr 13, 2009 15:17:30 GMT -5
***I am not a mod., so you don't have to listen to my review...
So, I like to glance over these profiles in sections at a time, and I noticed something:
You reffer to the Sith, and also give yourself a Sith title. The Sith haven't been around for years, and so in most cases can not be mentioned in bios.
You also reffer to your character as Darth Zephis, which connects to the Sith, and will probably not be allowed. It is completley up to the mods. whether to give you that one or not.
If it helps, you are allowed to replace Sith with Dark Jedi in your bio.
Aside from that, I noticed your bio. was a little short for a 41 year old. Try not to skip over years and say, "he continued this, or did this for a long period of time". I suggest looking at accepted profiles for further reference.
So, I like to glance over these profiles in sections at a time, and I noticed something:
You reffer to the Sith, and also give yourself a Sith title. The Sith haven't been around for years, and so in most cases can not be mentioned in bios.
You also reffer to your character as Darth Zephis, which connects to the Sith, and will probably not be allowed. It is completley up to the mods. whether to give you that one or not.
If it helps, you are allowed to replace Sith with Dark Jedi in your bio.
Aside from that, I noticed your bio. was a little short for a 41 year old. Try not to skip over years and say, "he continued this, or did this for a long period of time". I suggest looking at accepted profiles for further reference.
