Xeratec'una (Xera Tekuna)

[The Flickering Flame]

Name: Xeratec'una (Xera Tekuna)
Race: Rutian Twi'lek
Age: 23
Height: 5' 9"
Weight: 129 lbs
Appearance: Xera is a slim, beautiful Twi'lek female who has light blue skin, pale blue-grey eyes, and long lekku. She exhibits the coveted cone-shaped ears, and wears a simple Twi'lek headdress. Xera generally wears a tight, black leather jumpsuit that shows generous cleavage.
Birth place: Ryloth

Faction: Dark Jedi
Rank: Acolyte (already gone shopping for a master)

Bio:

Birth-3 years
Xera's parents were your average criminal scum. Her father, Reyacur'una, was a deathsticks dealer and a minor bounty hunter. Her mother was a professional hitwoman. This makes it difficult, to say the least, to get to their daughter and bring her to the Jedi. However, Jedi Master Arot Uiller and her companion, the Falleen Jedi Knight Xizen, tried exactly this. The two arrived at the dingy apartment building where the two criminals lived with their daughter, and went up to the apartment where the trio resided. They asked the parents if they could bring her to the Order, and they said yes. Then, the father had second thoughts. If she was Force-Sensitive she could be a valuable asset. He tried to stop them, but the mother refused to keep her, wanting to give her a good life. Reyacur'una, enraged, smacked his wife. For the last time. The abusive husband and father had a knife sticking out of his gut. He retaliated with a blaster bolt to his wife's forehead. They both collapsed, dead, to the ground. Xera was taken by the shocked Jedi to the Temple on Coruscant, and put in a class of Younglings.

4-9 years
Xera was a member of the Rancor Class of younglings. The day she was allowed to use a training lightsaber, she began to practive with a motivation not seen before. She wanted to weild one, to be a strong Knight who could protect the galaxy! The girl was the top of her nine-Youngling class regarding lightsaber skills. However, in Jedi Lore, she was a dismal failure. Xera was a very emotional girl, and as such, rarely even bothered to control her feelings. She regarded the Archives as "boring" and she thought that the Jedi were too uptight and self-righteous. The girl was amusing and cute at age five, but when she got past seven years of age, the Youngling Instructors grew worried. She needed to be brought in, to be "tamed", for she was too wild and unpredictable. They only partially succeeded- she pretended to be calm, even though she might be seething in fury. Her masters weren't fooled, but they thought it was a start.

10-14 years
It was in her tenth year that something important happened. A Jedi Knight, Aro Nikoska, chose her as a Padawan. He was an open, much more relaxed Jedi than most- so much, in fact, that it was surprising he ever passed the trials. The Jedi Knight took her as his Padawan, and, surprisingly, she began to reform. The young Twi'lek began to discard her carelessness, becoming a studious student, and she actually began to put a margin of control into her personality. The girl trained heavily in the Telekinetic area of the Force, alongside enhancing her body in combat. She had planned on being a Jedi Guardian, and her master supported her in that, bringing her with him on many missions.

15-17 years
It was during these years that Xera blossomed. The Twi'lek girl turned into a young woman- a very beautiful young woman. Xera inherited an innate beauty from her mother, and she flaunted it. The Twi'lek girl continued to tag along with her Master on many missions, and eventually, they went on a mission to Saleucami, to negotiate with the government of the planet on a trade dispute. However, the Tor'tungal- a petty gang with anger aimed at the Republic in general, and the Jedi in specific- ambushed the pair in an alley. The gang only had about fifteen members, and Aro stood his ground, fighting the group off, but it seemed that each gang member had a high-power fully automatic blaster rifle. Aro was covered in a rain of blasterfire, but not before he pushed the Twi'lek girl away with the Force. She saw him cut down with the storm of lasers, and it was then that her first step down from the light happened. She waited until the majority had left, then made her move. She used her lightsaber to eliminate the one criminal left in the alley. The hunt was on.

18-21 years
Xera was still on Saleucami during this time, and she was still hunting down those who had killed her master. Her source of income was using her exotic beauty as a dancing girl in the planet's only Hutt Crime Lord's cantina. He was credited with being abusive to his employees, but Xera endured it, for it would be the only source of income she could find. The Twi'lek also experimented with Force Powers, pushing her limits to create torturous ways to slowly kill a person. Eventually, the fallen Jedi had come up with a sickening attack- using Telekenisis to manipulate fire, in specific, and burning her targets alive- the ones who had actually participated in her master's execution died in the worst ways. By age twenty, after three long years, she had eliminated twelve out of the fifteen gang members- all save the leader and his two personal honor guards. All fourteen others were dead. She went to his now-deserted cave house, and searched him like a bloodhound. The Twi'lek picked off his two guards, both new members, and killed them one by one. She then left the last gang member alone. All alone, for three days, wandering around in his own house, locked inside. Then, she struck. She cut off his hands when he tried to shoot her, and proceeded to use a move that had never failed- telekenisis. He was killed by his own fireplace. She manipulated the fire, bending it to her will. It swirled around like a firey tornado around gang's last member, the leader, and then it narrowed. He was burned alive, horrifically mutilated, his eyeballs melted, his skin seared. The Weequay died horribly, and Xera watched the entire process.. The Twi'lek girl, having quickly tired of Saleucami, killed a pilot, took his starfighter, and left the accursed desert planet- but not before tying up the loose ends, executing the abusive Hutt she had worked for, with her typically gruesome style. She went to the first planet in the Navacomputer- Nar Shadaa.

21-23
Xera landed on Nar Shadaa, and quickly secured a job on the planet of scum. She worked at an exotic dancer in the Urglak's Cantina. Here, she encountered no abusive employers, so she was more than happy with the job. However, she did meet a strange indivual. A middle-aged human, his face tatooed and dressed in red with grey and black armor with... a lightsaber. He was a Dark Jedi, and when he asked Xera, she agreed to let him train her in the Dark Side. He was a good master in the sense that he taught her how entropy should be the Universe's order, and how she should help that go along. He tried to help her learn Force Lightning, but she couldn't do it under his tutelage, for he was forever irritating her. One night, he made an advance on his apprentice, and Xera, having become disgusted with his personality, and believing she had learned all she could from him, attacked him. He put up a good fight. The Twi'lek utilized Ataru's sub-form Sokan to fight him on a rooftop, and eventually, the Dark Jedi made a mistake. He tripped on a metal beam on the shabby rooftop, a mistake quite common for humans. Xera, being an opportunist, lunged in for the kill, and executed him quickly as he fell to the ground. After her fit of rage, though, she discovered that she would need another teacher- a better one. So she killed a female Zeltron pilot and took her starfighter. She jumped to Farrfin.


Lightsaber:
Color: Blue

Practiced Lightsaber forms:

Shii-Cho: 4
Makashi: 0
Soresu: 0
Ataru: 3
>>Sub-Form Sokan: 2
Shien / Djem So: 0
>>Sub-form Backhanded: 0
Niman: 0
>>Sub-form Jar-kai, or Dual Wield: 0
Juyo: 0
Double Bladed Combat: 0
Trakata: 0

Force-Sensitive Abilities or practices:

Telekinetic: 3
Telepathic: 2
Body: 2
Sense: 1
Protection: 0
Healing: 1
Destruction: 0

Specialized Skills: Seduction (it counts!)

Attributes:

Physical Strength: 4
Intelligence: 6
Speed: 5
Leadership: 6

Unarmed: 3
Melee Weapons: 6
Ranged Weapons: 5

Force Attunement: -2

RP Sample:

The Twi'lek Dark Jedi stepped down from the ramp of the ship, and onto the landing platform. Mechanics, techs, pilots, all hurried around, busily attending to the ship. Xera simply walked foward. As she walked, she added a sensual flair to her strut, swaing her hips seductively. Many male passersby paused to look at her, and she made sure to curl her lekku in disgust at the poor quality of the men looking at her. Her dangerously low-cut jumpsuit attracted the most attention, though, because of the extremely generous amount of cleavage being displayed. Her philosophy was, after all, "if you've got it, flaunt it."

The Twi'lek reached the end of the walkway, and turned down a narrow alleyway that gradually widened. After several minutes of walking, she arrived in a circular space, filled with scum of every kind. Xera walked fluidly over to a bench, and sat down, waiting for the crime lord on a low dais to begin whatever speech he wanted to make. To discourage unwanted suitors, the Twi'lek calmly reached down to her belt, and pulled the heavy blaster pistol out of its holster. She pulled a small cloth from the front of her jumpsuit, and began to polish the shining black pistol.

[starwarsgirl008]

Okay, I got a few things to point out here...

First off I have a suggestion. The mods. may disagree with me here, but I am gonna go ahead and share me thoughts here.

Your character hasn't really been trained in the Dark Side per say. I also haven't really seen any actions that give her a major evil personality, and it seems she isn't really a Dark Jedi, but more like a Grey Jedi. In fact, I don't know if you can call her that due to the fact she hasn't learned of her Force abilities until the very last line of her bio., and it seems you are going to RP her training, meaning she really doesn't have any official experience.

I would suggest starting the first points of her training in the bio. It will allow you to boost your stats. a bit, and make her an official Dark Jedi. Even if you just want to describe the first few months, I think you would have much to gain.

Bio.:

You explain how your character was a nasty child, but I don't see much nasty development until at least her teens. Are you leaving something out? Did she throw fits with her parents? Did she get in fights with kids at school? These are all important developmental issues that you should explain, if they occured that is.

How did she meet these two friends? What did she do with them? Did they ever fight, or were they always nice? Why did such a "nasty" child attract to these two creatures? It seems their death had an impact on your character, so I would think their lives involving your character should be explained a bit more.

I think you might want to add a little more cause and effect concerning the fire that burnt down your character's apartment. I think you put in the main details (the fact her toy was destroyed), but I still think you need some connecting details. How did it start? Where did her family go afterward? How did this effect her parents?

Also, how did she happen to pick up pick pocketing? Was she tempted when she saw a valuable item practically falling out of someone's pocket, or is there another story? I am also surprised you didn't jump on these pick pocketing stories to add massive detail to your bio. If you took the time to write up a few of her pick pocketing adventures it would not only make the bio a bit more interesting, but help the other members determine her master level in stealth, and allow you to boost up some stats.

Stats.:

I see these as a little high for someone who hasn't had any official Force training, let alone they just learned of their Force ability. If you take the first suggestion I made above, you may be able to keep these around the same levels. At this point I would say nothing above a 1, MAYBE one 2. If you take my suggestion, depending on how much you add, you may be able to boost up to some more 2's.

Attunement:

Again, with the facts I explained in the first paragraph, I would consider your character's attunement from a 0 to a -1.

[The Flickering Flame]

Edited. =)

[Karl the Unfettered]

I have a few suggestions.

First, if Xera's going to be Shard's apprentice she oughta be a little more advanced than she is now. He isn't one for having to start his students off from the start, see. But this can be fixed, both easily and not so easily.

The easy way is to expand her history about five or so years, wherein she met another Dark Jedi and learned from him; then he died, perhaps at Shard's hand or perhaps at hers, and then she meets Shard. That way she'd have a solid basis of the dark side already, and you can maintain what is already here while raising some of your stats.

The harder, and in my opinion more rewarding, way would be to rewrite her more substantially, have her be found by the Jedi and trained from infancy in the Force. Her master could die or be killed when she's in her late teens, and the grief of the loss might cause her to begin falling to the Dark Side (if the master was killed, this is even better, since she could avenge him and fall even faster). Then she would wander the galaxy, learning of the dark side on her own, perhaps working as a dancer or a "lady of the evening" and killing her clients, and then meeting my fellow along the way.

Either suggestion would come to the same thing, though the long way would, I think, be more satisfying, and you can earn yourself higher stats with the greater training she's had.

Finally, I'd much prefer if Xera and Shard met IC, since he already has an NPC student hanging about (which Xera would inevitably end up fighting). It might also pay to read his bio as well so you can get a hang of who you're gonna be stuck with, or ask Jace to give you a readers' digest version since it's rather long (but I did put all the stats and numbers at the top for easy access). So whatever you do, she cannot have met Shard in her backstory; it needs to happen in the course of RP.

That's all for now.

[The Flickering Flame]

I edited it again to fit the harder re-write. I relish challenges.

Oh, and to answer the questions now, Trakata is the lightsaber style of deactivating and reactivating the lightsaber to confuse the opponent, and to get it closer to improve the likelihood of contact. An aggresive, and rather devious, style of ligthsaber combat.

Sokan is the style of using the environment around you to gain the upper hand, mainly using acrobatics, wide swipes, and quick tumbles. It also features trying to corner the opponet and using the terrain to gain the upper hand. It's fairly agressive.

[Karl the Unfettered]

Well, that's a lot better, though I have to say the last bit with her taking on a whole group of terrorists all by herself is a bit unbelievable. What I would do, if this was my character, is I would try to go into more detail about stuff; read my own Jedi's bio to see what I mean.

Another thing is, I didn't really see anything in the history to indicate a 6 in Leadership; she comes across more as a fighter than a leader. So I would take that down to a 4 and raise your Speed to 7, which would fit her better.

Then I noticed you say she focused on Telekinesis and Body powers. Well, if that's the case, I'd expect to see higher numbers there; right now you have the Force stats of a new Padawan, not an almost-Knight. Bring those two up to a 5, raise Healing and Sense by 1 each, and make Destruction at least a 3. I'd also like to know if that whole acid-boiling thing has any basis in canon; if not I'd look for something else, something more plausible than what amounts to giving others killer ulcers.

Now, again, don't be afraid to aim a little high with your stats; you're gonna be apprenticed to one of the stronger Masters out there. Add a few more years onto her, make her 23 or 24 or so; write some more for the bio, and increase her stats accordingly (especially lightsaber stats). Make them reflect how you're going to play her, which seems to me to be as an Assassin-ish character (I could be wrong, that's just how I see her).

You're doing great, my friend, you're almost there. Just a bit more and you'll have it; again, read some of the other approved Knight bios for examples of what to aim for. Can't wait to have you with us!

[The Flickering Flame]

Modified.

[Jace]

Alright, this was a pretty shiny app, cept for one or two things.

1.

using Telekenisis to manipulate the body's fluids, jostling the atoms until the blood boiled and the liquid evaporated, leaving a dry, fluidless corpse

Assuming this technique works, it would take an advanced understanding of the Force, especially the darkside. Not something a person with a 3 in telepathy could accomplish.

2.

Xera, disgusted, gutted him like a Fish

Assuming her master was somewhat powerful, it isn't going to go down this easy. I need a little more explanation.

3.Alright your lightsaber stats are a little funky. You aren't going to have a 3 in Ataru while a 2 in Shii-cho. Switch it around. Also for her skills with a lightsaber, no Trakata. It is a more advanced technique, something which someone who doesn't even have mastery in Shii-cho wouldn't be using.

[The Flickering Flame]

Edited. Is it good now?

[Jace]

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